Bonjours à tous,
j'ai un écrit à rendre en anglais.. j'ai commencé, mais je n'ai plus beaucoup d'idées concernant le sujet..et par ailleurs, je pense avoir fait une bonne quantité de faute dans le peu que j'ai déjà pu écrire.. Donc si quelqu'un pouvait faire une petite correction rapide, ce serai très gentil !    
 
Le sujet est : In your opinion, can young people benefit from the experience of adults ?
Il faut rendre une réponse de minimum 300mots..
 
Pour le moment, voilà mon debut :
 
I think that it's very important that young people can benefit from the experience of adults because adults have already made the mistakes that young people haven't to reproduce... It's for that, adults have to speak with young people for explain them how life is difficult and how they have to do for living without problem.
Adults know what are dangerous and what are bad to do, so it's normal that they can teach young people before they will do bad things.
Everybody need to have somebody to explain what is life.. It's normal that is more difficult for orphan children to participate to active life because they can't benefit all the time from the experience of their parents.
The adults transmit their knowledge and they make young people want to do studies, sport...
They already can transmit their culture, their past history, lot of thing which is very interesting for the young's personal culture.
 
But it’s important to take into account that s young people don’t need all the time of the advice from the adults, because sometime they have to discover life by themself.. and it’s important to do make mistake in life, no one can run before walk, they have right to make mistake ! Making mistakes is the key to making progress.
 
 
 
Huuum, voilà, bon je vais finir ça, il me manque encore une centaine de mots -__-"
Merci d'avance si vous pouvez corriger les fautes, et les expressions mal formulées..  

 
Pas trop le temps de regarder tout ça.

"I think  it's very important that young people can benefit from the experience of adults because adults have already made the mistakes that young people haven't to reproduce... that s why adults have to speak with young people to explain them how difficult life is and how they have to do for living without problem.  
Adults know what is dangerous and what is bad to do, so it's normal that they can teach young people before they  do bad things.  
Everybody needs to have somebody to explain what life is... It's normal that it is more difficult for orphan children to participate to active life because they can't benefit all the time from the experience of their parents.  
The adults transmit their knowledge and they make young people want to do studies, sport...  
They already can transmit their culture, their past history, lot of things which is very interesting for the young's personal culture.  
 
But it’s important to take into account that  young people don’t need all the time  the advice from the adults, because sometime they have to discover life by themself.. and it’s important to  make mistakes in life, no one can run before he walks, they have the right to make mistake ! Making mistakes is the key to making progress. "
 
je suis nul en anglais mais voilà ma correction...